Christi Case Study Analysis Peer Review

1 Reviewer question: What is the author’s thesis? Stress is an emotion that a worker will experience in the workplace on many occasions.

2 Reviewer question: Is the thesis clearly stated? If not, how would you help the writer restate it? I think Joseph could have expounded on his thesis a little more to provide a hint to the problems at hand and possible solution. Example: Stress is an emotion workers may experience in the workplace on occasion and has caused numerous complications for Carl such as disorganization and procrastination; however with some additional training and self discipline Carl’s stress can be alleviated allowing him to perform more efficiently.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggestions. Christi offered valuable information such as the thesis example that I implemented in my case study. After reading how a thesis statement should be written and the information it should have in it. The thesis should mention the issues that I will be discussing in my paper. I was missing the two strong reasons that supported my opinion.

3 Reviewer question: Does the essay’s body stick to the main topic? If not, where does it digress, and how could the writer revise the paper to make it stay more on the main topic? Joseph strayed slightly in the “Key Problem” header from his thesis of stress in workplace. To keep the thesis of stress in workplace at the center of analysis he could say something like: The portrayal of professionalism within a business is the first impression a new employee will see when they are going through the orientation process and stress experienced by inexperienced leaders can delude one’s impression.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes. I didn’t make the suggested changes offered by Christi “The portrayal of professionalism within a business is the first impression a new employee will see when they are going through the orientation process and stress experienced by inexperienced leaders can delude one’s impression.” Because by stating “portrayal of professionalism within a business” should automatically mean stress to the reader without physically stating the word stress.

4 Reviewer question: Does the paper contain any ambiguously-worded or confusing sentences? Please list them below and offer a suggested revision for each one you identify “After reviewing all issues, I will discuss the possible solutions and the proposed solution that he should follow to assure this situation will not happen again.”

After review of all issues, possible solutions will be offered to help Carl Robins rectify the situation he is presently faced with and insure issues will not be problematic in future.

“As stress plays an important factor in today’s workforce because of the overloading of job duties (see Appendix A for demographic information).”  I would remove this sentence because there is no Appendix A to be viewed.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes. I did not make the suggested changes “After review of all issues, possible solutions will be offered to help Carl Robins rectify the situation he is presently faced with and insure issues will not be problematic in future. Or I would remove this sentence because there is no Appendix A to be viewed.” by Christi because, in my opinion the use of the word “I” positions the writer in the paper. Also there is an Appendix located on page 10, that appendix states that the main cause of stress in a work place is the workload.

5 Reviewer question: Which closing strategy did the writer use? Is the closing effective? Why or why not? Offer a revision suggestion for making the closing more effective. There was no conclusion statement to be examined and it would have helped to wrap everything up really well.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes? There were no changes made because there was none suggested. I will go back to add a conclusion statement to bring the reader in from all the arguments so there wouldn’t be any confusion.

6 Reviewer question: Please give the writer feedback regarding the essay’s effect on you. I can see the effects of stress on employees and how that can affect the professionalism of a company. I can also see the alleviating stress can drastically improve function of business.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes. No changes made, my main objective of this case study was to prove that stress in the workplace effects professionalism. Christi stated that she could clearly see the effects of stress in the workplace.